Question

Help finishing my poem please?

I look in your eyes:

I can see what no one knows

All the lies you told

And the secrets you hold

I can see what you protect deep down

The fears that come to you in the night

And the worries that cling to you so tight

I can see what you desire

Your goals are great and set very high

And the things you long for reach to the sky

I can see your sorrows

*Help*

I can see what you keep from the world

The hidden talents you store away

And the music you will never play

I can see what gives you joy

Your family and friends

And the love they send

I can see more than you think

Your eyes tell a story

*Help*

also anything that you think might sound better! i know im a terrible poet thats why i need help :)

Answers

Your poem is actually pretty good, I like it, but to help you finish it, I would add this:

I look in your eyes:

I can see what no one knows

All the lies you told

And the secrets you hold

I can see what you protect deep down

The fears that come to you in the night

And the worries that cling to you so tight

I can see what you desire

Your goals are great and set *on* high

And the things you long for reaches *toward* the sky

I can see your sorrows

*Buried beneath your skin

Awaiting to free the anger within*

I can see what you keep from the world

The hidden talents you store away

And the music you will never play

I can see what gives you joy

Your family and friends

And the love they send

I can see more than you think

Your eyes tell a story

*Of your true self and glory*

*When I look in your eyes

I see you*

I hope this helps =)

#1

it made me worry :0

#2

Help part could be like this:

I can see what hurts and make you cry

I can see what makes your spirit die

Last line"

Your life will have no happiness or glory

#3